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joynone
12-06-2006, 10:53 AM
Topic:



Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Parents are the best teachers.

Use specific teasons and examples to support your answer.



My writhing:



Nowadays,teachers are enacting a more and more important role in people's life,which sometimes even decide whether a person can get fruit in his career.And everyone want to meet his best teacher who are able to lead him to a bright future.So most of us are looking for a group of people who will be good teachers.But I think there are two persons nearby us we usually ignore,our parents.



First of all,parents teach us talk.Everyone will not deny that talk is very an important thing for human without which one could not do anything.For the point,I ever saw that my aunt taught my cousin how to say mommy and either did my mama I believe.So I think that he can express himself,say,"I love my mother",just since then.And now,he is learning in high school where you could not be in if he weren't able to talk.



Second,parents teach us walk.I have a picture which remember the periods when I can not walk.And I possess another one in which I am standing with my parents who are smiling for my first walking.I think the two picture display a process that is how I can walk like I do everyday.If there were no parents,I think I would just be able to crawl as a wolf.



Last but not the least,parents encourage us.I believe that most of basketball funs know NBA star Iverson.Just his mother is great because she alway supported Iverson to play basketball though she was poor.At one time,Iverson need a pair of basketball shoes,so she collected enough money to buy one for him but by stoping using electricity for a mouth.Today,everyone,including those NBA-unknower,knows that Iverson is rich,but if without his mother,he would just be a poor blackman now.



Although some people think that teachers in school have more chance to be the best and regard their parents as simplly something important one.And they always believe that knowledge telling is just the thing that decide if one is a teacher.But I think they do not exactly realize that without talking,walking and encouragement in their life,they wouldn't even know what is school.So if you ask me who are my best teachers,my answer will be my parents.

byquist
12-23-2006, 10:25 AM
J,

Very organized and makes total sense. Naturally, there are some English grammar rearrangements, but that is just the adjustment from Chinese to English. Those changes from language to language are not unusual, and would apply to the English-speaker converting into Chinese. Good illustration, including Iverson.

Obviously, it can be longer but that is more a matter of letting your whimsy fly -- turning into a writing bulldog.

Also, you should have an English thesaurus, or go to "thesaurus.com" You plug in a word, such as your "talk" or "walk" and see a mass of synonyms to put in place of the original, simple word.

Also, wise to hit the typing space bar two times between sentences.

Nice work!