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seshendrasharma
11-21-2006, 01:24 AM
Bereft of leaves, the naked branch
That spreads onto our balcony
Is the curvature of mystery
Which poses the question eternally
Its flame like twigs tiny, newborn, its branches of fruits that stop the wayfarer
The cuckoos that sing in its cool shade
The little blue rags of sky caught in its leaves and keep fluttering-
Where are they! Where did they go!
Now of course it is a naked branch,
At its end a kite like a tail of sankranthi
That vanished into time like evaporating tear invisible-
If I show you one visible posture
I know you people devour the entire invisible world of my thoughts and feelings
I know – that is why –I say it is naked but in that branch
Time is flowing like electric current in the copper wire.


–Seshendra Sharma

Dr Eep
11-21-2006, 07:54 AM
I love your use of nature in your writing and imagery. Very beautiful words indeed.

Riesa
11-21-2006, 08:13 AM
The cuckoos that sing in its cool shade
The little blue rags of sky caught in its leaves and keep fluttering

I agree with Dr. Eep, very beautiful images. I feel, hear and see. and I have another new word to look up: Sankranthi.



http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sankranthi

Virgil
11-21-2006, 08:57 AM
Overall, very nice. But I absolutely love the last line:
"Time is flowing like electric current in the copper wire." :thumbs_up

I wish I had written that. :D

OZEED
11-24-2006, 04:00 AM
Awesome, line of thoughts. I really did enjoy that!
I get such a vivid picture of the buzz of electricity passing through the wire.
Well done.