another piece of eight (will try to let up soon)

[azmuse]

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[Koa]

I like the way the rhythm is so 'interrupted'...you know what i mean, all the run-on-lines... they make you hold your breath until you get to the end.
It's also kinda sweet...kinda uhm...disturbing in a way...
(can't really elaborate more, it's hard to find words...or even concepts ;))

[Isagel]

I do not think I´ve read anything like it. As Koa writes it takes the breath away.
I´ll be back with comments later.

[azmuse]

Hi Koa...you aren't evil at all ;) why do you pretend to be?
it sort of rushed over its own feet as i wrote it; think that's how the run-ons came into being...and also, was sort of like the experiences, how they tripped and stumbled over each other, too

Isagel :)
it's actually strange to look at something like that and wonder 1. how did my fingers do that 3. why am i so naked 7. why does merde like this happen, and 8. thank goodness you all are kind enough to be the recipients of therapy

[Koa]

LOL I think I understand that feeling...

Hey why am I not evil? :(:(:( (I'd like to insult you now to prove I'm evil but I don't feel like it cos you're nice...damn maybe I'm really not evil *personal crisis* *hides in a corner crying until she's evil again*) :D

[ihrocks]

Koa,

The secret's out...you are completely unevil! You are...dare I say it?....kind.

Az,

Stunning, frightening, and unforgettable.

ihrocks

[azmuse]

*hopes that Koa is happily evil/kind again and no longer crying*

hmm. is that how the show's title "evil kinevil" came into being...

[Jayyy]

I read this while I was away, and I couldn't respond, so let me respond now and say how much I enjoyed this flow. I try to use a similar style when I can, but never as nicely as you have done. I think it's one of those things that just kind of happens as you're writing it, almost as if by luck.

It reminds me a lot of a band called O.r.g.y; every one of their songs consists of a beginning that *could* attach to the previous sentence, and an ending with no period that *could* attach to the next sentence.

The result is limitless multidimensional language.

[sloegin]

Twisted, is always delightful.

[azmuse]

yes, am SO lucky to be the family pretzel...ah well.
*turns face to sky and skips all the way from dawn to dawn, in manner of Little Prince from Asteroid B-612...

[amuse]

by the way, since some of you still check this thread out, this poem's now in my collection because #2 at http://www.online-literature.com/forums/showthread.php?s=&threadid=2215