Finally a 'happy' poem by me

[WX6[ck]]

Since its christmas, i am going to post a 'happy' poem. I find it hard to write, maybe because its winter and horribly depressing weather or maybe im just evil ;).

The trees grow tall at dyrhavn*
Over the lake where the couple first met
Beyond the plains where the deer gracefully glide

Theres some place yonder my house
Where nature plants it's seed
Where the grass is lush and the flowers bloom
Where man must wonder why the birds sing so sweetly
Why butterflies are so entrancing
Why bees collect the sweet nectar like a little boy licking his lolli-pop

You cant help but awe, at this magnificent display of life
And its summer so sit back and enjoy sun.

*Nature park, real close to my house

[Koa]

:rolleyes: Sorry to interrupt the party but one of the reasons why I destes Christmas is that everyone's supposed to be good and happy... What if I want to feel as depressed and evil as usual anyway??? :mad: :mad: :mad: So no offence but I don't like your introduction... Plus, good poetry comes mostly from bad feelings... I'm not saying happy poetry can't exist, but it's usually less effective I think... (but that's not the point, poetry deals with feelings, whether good or bad).

Ok, I read the poem after this rant, maybe I'm influenced by my attitude, but honestly I can't say I like it much... i think I understand the feeling behind it, when you see the world and think 'ooooh' and you're heart is full of some kinf of...yes 'awe' as you said... but come on, the grass, the birds, the butterflies...not really the most original of things... (thought the lollipop is funny eheh :)).

[Koa]

Btw, maybe the Christmas atmosphere made me seem more bitter than I should have been in that post... I apologise if I did seem bitter.

[WX6[ck]]

Spot on. The poem is crap right? I'm not saying its supposed to be, i'm just saying, i got so many bad feelings and all those sorts that you could call me evil. So therefore it is nearly impossible for someone who is evil to write 'happy' poetry. get my drift?

Summary: The poem sucks. I cannot write 'happy' poetry when your unhappy/bad-natured because, you just cant. I'm just evil.

Summary of the summary: The poem sucks because im evil :P

P.S. You got a good point anout christmas being happy and all, forcebly.

[fayefaye]

yeah, you know what? Write evil poetry, W. you're miserable poems are 1000x better than the ones where you try to sound happy. It's palpably phony. you're forcing it. That one to your mother, for instance. Sure sweet, but, honestly? crappy. I do think your poetry is good when it's dark. Sometimes it's just..... really dark and that can be off-putting. *now I sound like an idiot* Put it this way-people don't necessarily like dark poetry because they don't like to face things. BUT there's a difference to what people like and what is necessarily good.

[Koa]

Why try to be happy when you're evil then? I gave up long ago.
Enjoy being evil and make the best poetry out of it, that's how it works.