About lost freindship

[DumbLikeAPoet]

Softly sing sentimental songs
Bring back moments best forgoten
Torture ourselves with our regrets
Keep the old songs in the closet

Simple songs confuse and conflict
flawed people become perfection
Emotions betray memories
Keep the lyrics from changing pasts

Slightly strum and stroke the cords
Inevitably we become strangers
Unable to speak the words and phrases
That could redeem one to another

Spending nights speaking self righteously
We’ve grown and found we’re not 16
Grown apathetic and atrophied
I’m sorry for what I’ve become

Jonus

The only person I've ever let read anything I wrote is my wife....Do you think I should keep that up?

[Koa]

Originally posted by DumbLikeAPoet

We’ve grown and found we’re not 16
Grown apathetic and atrophied
I’m sorry for what I’ve become



Oh God, that's my life in this moment. Summed up in those 3 lines.

As for showing, I don't know... It's great that your first reader is your wife, but I think that if you feel like it, it's good to show to someone else too, like here... personally the closer a person is to me, the harder I find to show it, e.g. I've never even mentioned my poems to my friends, though I've shown some to some special people, and to strangers. Does it make sense?


The poem... i feel it 'light', in the sense that it flows...It flows well and I can relate to most of it, growing slowly distant...

[Phoenix_Tears]

Spending nights speaking self righteously
We’ve grown and found we’re not 16
Grown apathetic and atrophied
I’m sorry for what I’ve become

strangly that is me as well right now.

Or a twisted version..

I just found out one of the people i had thought to be one of my closest friends, one of the two people i would die for in this world, hated me all along and talked about me behind my back.

[DumbLikeAPoet]

I'm very sorry to hear that Phoenix. I'm sure my sympothies won't make you feel better but I just want you to know that I really do feel sorry for you.

Jonus

[Koa]

I know that very well too... a long depression and a great number of my poems came from the loss of a friend (who decided she didn't need me anymore and just threw me away). Almost 5 years ago now... damn... still remember it tho.

[BloodStaindRose]

i think its wonderful you confide in your wife!
your work is very nice but if you do not feel comfortable showing the public your work dont!?
i also love writing poetry--in secret but only because it is on a subject no one would understand. but if you dont write on private matters go for it!

[BloodStaindRose]

my friendship wasnt lost but will always be in my heart!
2 years ago one of my friends was murdered at the age of 14
i never got the chance to tell her how sorry i was for not being when she needed me!?
for some reason your poem captivates the feeling!
thank you!

[Phoenix_Tears]

Understandable.. in the past month and a half, a friend of my bestest friend ever, Xtyna, better known as tear_killer.. commited suicide, or as in our theory.. was murdered by her parents.

and another good friend of mine commited suicide a week ago.

[DumbLikeAPoet]

I lost a friend to suicide almost 3 years ago. It was probably one of the hardest things I've gone thru. I will never forget him but after this long I think about the pain of him being gone less and less. When I do think of him it is usually about the good memories. Suicide touches so many lives.

Jonus

[Isagel]

Softly sing sentimental songs
Bring back moments best forgoten
Torture ourselves with our regrets
Keep the old songs in the closet

I really liked this opening.

"The only person I've ever let read anything I wrote is my wife....Do you think I should keep that up?"

Keep up writing-yes.
Keep up showing your wife your work- yes,that is a wonderfull compliment to her. My fiance shows me his work.I´m his harshest critic,but only because I respect him and his work enough to be honest. Our discussions on his writing is intellectual pleasure. Strangely enough I think it is hard to show him my poetry.
Keep up only showing your wife- No, please.

(And thanks for quoting me. Makes me feel like a writer. Cool!)

[Jayyy]

Very strong nostalgic statement;

Well done.