Trilogy of Terror for9/11

[lanaia74]

The twin brothers glistened in the New York sun before tragedy hit that day
No one knew soon there would be intense oblivion, chaos, and darkness
One man's hatred made us relinquish to a sick twisted game we did not wish to play
The fire, the devastation, and the death to all this one man would confess.

A trilogy of terror was released that day hatred, devastation, and death
The towers, the pentagon, all the hurt, the sadness, and the pain
So many died not knowing what happened or why as they took their last breath
Like a pyroclastic cloud, suffocation for most then death from this sick act
what was gained?

Nothing was gained, but the question remains why did so many have to perish that faithful awful day
The awful question of why forever branded in our history
So much hatred. I am sure like me, you weren't raised that way
To inflict such pain and agony, a never ending story.

Was the release of such hatred an outlet for the one that obtained the guilt?
Was there some lesson to be learned from that day?
No suspicions from those that went away, just like a flower as it wilts
I know of no evil that was committed but look at the price we had to pay.

That day made us do the opposite of what we were expected to do
The trilogy of terror was very real and made itself well known
We all remember, we will never forget, no need for a review
United and a proud nation we will always be, from this horrid experience ,we must survive from all the seeds we have sewn.

[jon1jt]

Oh boy, here we go again. I'm going to bite my tongue on this one and say, this poem needs a lot of work. Start by telling the reader something the media hasn't embellished a gazillion times over. This reads like a nice journal entry of a perceptive teen who has just observed the event. But this is five years later, c'mon.

While you're at it, i recommend that you get away from these god-awful cliches---

We all remember, we will never forget, no need for a review
United and a proud nation we will always be, from this horrid experience ,we must survive from all the seeds we have sewn.

"No need for a review"? But you just gave us one in that simple George Bush-esque way.

"We all remember, we will never forget..."

Actually, he says it better:
"We will not tire, we will not falter, and we will not fail."

[Nightwalk]

A fine poem lanaia74. :)