The joy of Hate

[spacetoon]

Hi

sometimes , if I cut off a tooth , it is easier than writing a poem. So, this is a very very descent poem, But I hope it is OK. Please, feedback.

"The Joy Of Hate"

Once, a dark fate,
Filled my heart,
With a joy of hate,
For losing what I love,
And wait.

Once, my destiny deceived me,
Losing me what was mine,
Now I know I am in pain,
Like I was in a blood drain,
My face turned pale, and then I prate,
Gathering the joy of hate.


Peace....
Spacetoon.

[lily of valley]

Hi spacetoon,
This is a difficult thing.
In the second stanza, Are u blaming destiny or fate or the unknown power for your losses???
I find the situation in the first stanza different from the one in the second stanza, but the pain experience keeps going…..
I read your poem many times, but I am unable to solve this puzzle.

Still I like it….




I felt a funeral in my brain ,
And mourners , to and fro ,
Kept treading till it seemed
That sense was breaking through.