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[axl_32779]

I DO WHAT I GOTTA’ DO (Intriguing isn’t it)


I’m a sittin home
Stairin’ at this phone
But it wont ring, and I cant sing

Such a sweet mess,
That much I confess
Where’s this going, What the hell am I doin’
So I do,
what I gotta’ do
While I’m waitin, yea waitin’ on you

Always in my head
See you in my bed
But your not there, I look up n I swear
So I do,
what I gotta’ do
While I’m waitin’, yea waitin’ on you

And I can’t take waiting on you…..
But I do, what I gotta do, now baby
I Cant stand the thought of losin’ you…….
So I do, yea I do, what I gotta do
(Lil’ break, lil’ solo)

Such a sweet mess,
That much I confess
Where’s this going, What the hell am I doin’

Waiting out my time
Until you are mine
(Think) I’m turning manic, (This) sh1t’s making me frantic
So I do,
what I gotta’ do
While I’m waitin’, yea waitin’ on you

And I can’t take waiting for you……..
But I do, what I gotta do, now baby
I can’t stand the thought of losin’ you……….
So I do, yea I do what I gotta’ do
Yea I can’t stand ever ever losin’ you….
So I do…..
Yeaaaa I do……(segway)

Will you come with me darlin’
Come with me to the sea
I’ll take you there sweet baby
The sea of love for you n’ me
That’s where your heart is honey
That’s where you’ll find my soul
And in my arms you’ll stay cause,
You’re the only thing that can make me hole……….

And that’s why I do,
yeaaaaaa…….. I do…
What- I -gotta do……………….(whispered)


I want all comments good or bad, want to know if i suck

[nicholasburrus]

Super

[den]

The intent is `sweet' but there's a lot of cliche's there man. I'm sure it could be catchy depending on the tune...

[sloegin]

I second den's comment of "cliche ridden". I don't like the rhyme scheme.

[fayefaye]

Some of the lyrics do lack a bit of inspiration. Maybe if you put it to really good music no-one would care..? Keep trying.

[axl_32779]

thanks for your honest comments, i guess it sounds better when the music is in your head driving it.
do do do, da da da, is all want to say to you
sting

[nicholasburrus]

Marvolus

[nicholasburrus]

Originally posted by axl_32779
thanks for your honest comments, i guess it sounds better when the music is in your head driving it.
do do do, da da da, is all want to say to you
sting


Your Welcome

[Triskele]

heya,

would like it but the exessive use of the words "baby" and "darlin"... its a great start though, and i like the imagery and progression...

adios

[ShoutGrace]

Last Activity: 12-21-2003 08:32 PM


I think that we are a little too late. :D