Check this poem out... and help me out...

[ghostofme15]

Well... Im not really good at poem structure as some call it...
But I dont need to be a professional either... I do it just to put my ideas on paper...
and things that cross my mind dayly...

I want you guys to tell me... what do you think of this poem... and what would be good to be improved...

http://www.online-poetry.com/poem/579

Thanks...
BTW Im new, and this was my first poem posted :)