New poem!

[oXCherryBabyXo]

Hey I just wrote this poem and I'm really interested to see what others think. Please comment and offer any suggestions you may want to help improve.


Every time I look at you,
I see who I want to be.
You’re eyes sparkle,
And you look as though
I’m all you need.
That look gives me the power,
To do what I want
And be who I really am.
You see me as me
Not whom everyone thinks I am.
I’m truly yours.
You’ve stolen my heart,
And I never want that to change.
This is what I want,
You’re what I need
To be the person I want to be.

By: Monica Wormsbecher

[Black_Tears]

I like this poem! You show your true feelings of how a person close to you makes you feel. it seems that person is the only person you can be yourself with and it's good. It has a atmosphere that makes me fell the same way you do. I like it and I like the way you've written it. [x]