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Reason is a cow
06-21-2006, 08:58 PM
I'm hesitant to post my work. But for art's sake, here's one. It's far from my best, and not my favorite, EDIT I changed my poem of choice.

I have no will
to be a pawn
in the hands
of an idiot God
But I am bad
at chess
Checkmate
you win again

I guess feedback would be cool. Thanks.

I think my poetry is untraditional that's why it's hard to label. But here's another that I consider more generic though it means just as much to me. Maybe this will be more suitable..heh, though all my poems are very ambiguous..

Whenever I look
At my yellow-stained palms
I feel a sickening
Sense of remorse

How can I fly
On a blood spotted blanket
Or ride naked
On the spiked back of a horse

They are old hands
Not mine
They belong
To the hours

They are clock hands
They quaintly
My self
Do devour

Do devour
My self
A loud echoing
Laughter

Smiles sent
Down the river
Are lit up
By the rafter

Let’s toast
Everyone
Let’s raise
Our glasses

To the dream
We call God
To the dream
Of dry masses.

cuppajoe_9
06-22-2006, 01:08 AM
I read it twice and I didn't like it. Then I read it again, realized that weren't trying to rhyme 'pawn' with 'God', and I liked it.

amanda_isabel
06-22-2006, 11:08 AM
it's not bad, reason is a cow. peronally, i liked it.

Reason is a cow
06-22-2006, 03:03 PM
:). thank you for the comments. not all things rhyme, heh, life is no sonnet.

and word to jim casey boll weevil.

grace86
06-22-2006, 03:15 PM
I think...I like this poem. You have talent.