how could i know that i am in love ?

[unknown_lady]

this is my first topic and my first word

may i share it with you i know that i can not wrote some thing good and i wish too so right now i'm practise and my writing skill is not that good
here look to my word and judge according to it

i hope you will like it :

HoW CoUlD I KnOw If i am in love or not

i have not loved before and i think i havenot loved yet

i have those feeling inside between my heart and my mind

thoese feeling whoes controlled my life

they stole my heart stole the thought in my mind

they made my glad
they made my sad

they make my confuse between what is right and what is wrong
what is real what isimagenative and what is illusion and disillusion

should i told the people about my feeling or should i hide
should i told the person who made me feel like that or not
i think to hide it is the best things to do in this false world

if this what they call love maybe i'm in love
even thought if this what they called hate maybe i hate

i hope you will like it even if you donot reply and told me if you like it or not

i think its not well-made because they are my first write
told my your impresion i'm waiting

follows i do not want an answer because i know that im in love what i'm asking is "'do you like my words or not ?"' do i have afuture in writing i knoe its no well made but it's my first write is it good or not ?
should i practise more

[cuppajoe_9]

Nobody can tell you whether or not you are in love, me included.

I can tell you that if you are, and you never tell him/her, you will be very angry with yourself about it later.

[unknown_lady]

thank you bro for your reply

;)

[Loveless]

I agree with cuppajoe 9, if you don't tell that person you will be angry with yourself later. And you could be in love, if you took the time to think about you feelings and them write/type them down? I belive that you are in love, no matter if it even is small.

[Madhuri]

I think one just knows, if they are in love....it is an intution that tells you......as of now if your intution says that, then believe me you are.

Loveless, when one is in love, that is a simple state of being....I dont think one can be in big or small love.

And yes, Unknown Lady, you should tell the person about your feelings. Why to regret later, thinking if I had expressed, perhaps something would have happened...

Good Luck;):)

[amanda_isabel]

i agree with everyone here. tell the person you love him. but think it over first. analyze your feelings. it helps. it shows your possible options. and if you really are in love, then, my dear, congratulations.

[unknown_lady]

thanke you all for your reply

im so glad to see you here love less
madhuri amanda_isabel

thank you all for your beatiful replys

i read what you have wrote and i like your replys

and i wish if you like my words

[Kelly_Sprout]

Unknown Lady,

I liked your poem. It has some powerful lines in it. Remember that the writer's tools are words. How you combine them, to be different than anyone else has ever combined them, to punch or caress or awaken someone's mind is the most powerful thing you can do.

That said, I have three critique comments. Please listen to them coming from my heart, wanting to help you practice and grow. I am not tearing you down or criticizing you!


First, typing anything in alternating CaPs AnD lOwErCaSe is distracting and difficult to read. Your objective in writing is to get people to read what you wrote, to understand your mind and to identify with your feelings. Typing the remainder in all lower case is OK, because that is not difficult to read, but typing IN ALL CAPS IS NOT ONLY DISTRACTING BUT ALSO CONSIDERED SHOUTING. (You didn't do that but I thought I'd through the comment in anyway.)

Second, you should look up any word you think you don't know how to spell. If you have a word processor, let it do a spell-check for you. If you type in a text editor, keep a dictionary handy. I did not allow myself to become bogged down in your spelling and read your poem for its message, but if you wish to become a writer, you will need to practice spelling.

Third, some of your phrases were so good! And yet, I think they could be made even better with some small changes. For example:

Ex. 1: have not loved before and i think i have not loved yet

I liked this so much, but the thought that went through my mind was that it would sound more, what...? musical?... balanced?, if you compared past to future instead of past to present:

"have not loved before and i think i might not love again"

This emphasizes the strength of the love right now, in my mind, at the very same time that it is expressing doubt if you even know what love is.

Ex. 2: i have those feeling inside between my heart and my mind

Again, wow! This is good stuff! I like the fact that the feelings are not at home in either the heart or the mind, alone, but living in the space between them. Your next several lines make some comparisons about how experiencing these feelings can be confusing. My suggestion is to separate each comparison into a pair of lines of its own instead of scrunching them all together.

thoese feeling whoes controlled my life

they stole my heart stole the thought in my mind

they made my glad
they made my sad

they make my confuse between what is right and what is wrong
what is real what isimagenative and what is illusion and disillusion

should i told the people about my feeling or should i hide
should i told the person who made me feel like that or not

If feelings control life (heart), then thoughts steal the mind.

glad/sad This is what I mean by "pairs" so I would treat the next lines this way:

they make me confused between

what is right
and what is wrong

what is real
what is imaginative

what is illusion
and delusion

should I tell people about my feelings
or should I hide?



And so, Unknown Lady, I hope that I have given you some ideas about what you can do with these words! It is a very promising poem.