Sitting Alone

[Foxvoices]

Sitting alone in the dark and waiting.
Will she understand when I tell her...when I try to explain?
Probably she will, for she knows my weaknesses and my foibles.
That won't make it any easier to admit, though,
as I have been forced to do so many times in the past.
I hear her car in the driveway now.
She'll open the door in the dark and know
that something must be wrong...again.
She enters and tentatively says, "Honey, what's wrong?
Why are you sitting alone in the dark like this?"
Knowing the sooner I admit my failings the better,
I steel myself for the moment of truth and say,
"Do you know where in the hell I put the fuses?"

[Xamonas Chegwe]

Nice turn. It had me starting to think cliché for a second and then - Bam! the trouble with this sort of poem is that it only works once, once you know what is coming, it's defused (allusion to your poem intended ;) ). It's still good though.

[ktd222]

Will she understand when I tell her...when I try to explain?
Probably she will, for she knows my weaknesses and my foibles.


She'll open the door in the dark and know
that something must be wrong...again.

I like the switch from one quote to the next quote. She understands your weaknesses and foibles, and at the same time, you 'know' what her reaction to your reaction will be.

[ktd222]

I wished the poem didn't defuse like Xam alluded to, that closes the poem into a 'never ending cycle' and really does take away from the nice 'switch' you created in your poem.