Poem:Picture Perfect

[xXxBrittanyxXx]

Everything looks perfect from far away.
Everthing seems fine when your standing over there.
But when you walk towards me can you see through my mask?
Can you see through these fake feelings?
I smile when I'm sad.
I laugh when I'm angry.
When there's nothing left to say,
I pretend to look the other way.
Can you hear through my silence?
Can you see through the blindness?
Picture perfect to the distant world.
A screw up to the close.
When you walk towards me
I walk away.
It seems like you have to walk a mile
Just to be one step closer to me.
Although I have miles to go,
It seems I'm not walking at all.
Picture perfect to the outside world
A screw up on the inside.

[ktd222]

I see motion in this poem; have you thought about the literal shift of words and lines to add to this affect?

[xXxBrittanyxXx]

i didnt really mean for my poem to have motion...i guess it just appears that way cuz i centered it.

[ktd222]

What I was saying is that your topic seems to be about how things seem far away and up close, so I'm suggesting 'motion' will add an extra effect to your topic.

[xXxBrittanyxXx]

o ok now i get what you are saying. yea that would be cool extra effect.