A practice

[white camellia]

One day as I woke up
From a cicada's courting
Unbearably sexier than a human's
I threw away the blankets of winter
And shed the skin of spring
Front legs a symbolic yawning
Caressing the Bed's crimpled forehead

A clear rush in the middle
Blocked at a tuber
Burst into a sterile tower
Inside it blossomed
The Doctrine of Signatures
Then I closed the medical book
In a vision of boiling spadix

[blp]

Really amazing, white camellia. Reading it makes me feel a little giddy.

You might want to change 'unbearable' to 'unbearably'.

[white camellia]

Really amazing, white camellia. Reading it makes me feel a little giddy.

You might want to change 'unbearable' to 'unbearably'.

Ahh, indeed, i've changed it. :p

so glad that it made you feel that way!

it's amazingly sunny today with the singing of cicadas' somewhere in the small bamboo woods outside my window ... and i incredibly got excited. :D

[blp]

Ahh, indeed, i've changed it. :p

so glad that it made you feel that way!

it's amazingly sunny today with the singing of cicadas' somewhere in the small bamboo woods outside my window ... and i incredibly got excited. :D

And I'm getting incredibly jealous. I'm sitting in an office on a grey, cold day in London. Not a sexy cicada in sight.

[white camellia]

O, hehe ... then hope my little poem could make up. ;-P

by the bye, may i ask that is there a slight shock in these lines?

[blp]

O, hehe ... then hope my little poem could make up. ;-P

by the bye, may i ask that is there a slight shock in these lines?

Oh yes. There is.

[Riesa]

Nice, white camellia, I understand blp's comment about feeling slightly giddy, but I feel dizzy.

:D

[white camellia]

Nice, white camellia, I understand blp's comment about feeling slightly giddy, but I feel dizzy.

:D

hmm, at least, you are not bored. thank you, Riesa!

:D

[amuse]

ooh la la!

[Xamonas Chegwe]

Lovely, sexy, suggestive words WC. Let's have some more from you soon.

[Gozeta]

Wow! you felt all that from the singing of cicadas'?? Truly amazing! (poetry that is)

[Virgil]

I liked the first stanza very much, especially the opeing lines: "One day as I woke up'/From a cicada's courting". Very beautiful. Instead of saying "Front legs a symbolic yawning" why not take out the symbolic word and say "Front legs yawning". You might have to adjust the transition to the next line, but I don't know why you have to tell us it's symbolic. Perhaps you have a reason.


I wasn't as overwhlemed by the second stanza. Perhaps I don't quite understand it, and the fault perhaps lies with me. I take it as a contrast to the opening stanza, the beauty of the cicadas singing versus clinical biology. I didn't get what was going on with "blocked in the middle"(?) and "Doctrine of Signatures" (?). Perhaps it's me. I do like the closing image of "boiling spadix".

[Virgil]

Wow! you felt all that from the singing of cicadas'?? Truly amazing! (poetry that is)
Gozeta - We keep following each other with posts. Given we have the same avatar, I wonder if we're confusing the dickins out of people. :lol: :lol:

[chmpman]

I was confused, by the avatars that is. Also, slightly the poem, but I like it, and feel I'll have to reread it and ponder awhile to understand it. Which is great, especially if you wrote it feeling the spontaneous impression of the cicadas, it has a lasting power.

[white camellia]

yes, symbolic and signatures(i see the existence and motion of animals and plants as some symbols), and i love the feeling to it when i say it symbolic.

the second stanza is mainly about a vision(after the thought of Amorphophallus titanum)

:D thank you!

[Pensive]

Hey camellia, nice job! The first stanza is especially very nicely-written.

[Xamonas Chegwe]

Virgil,

The 'doctrine of signatures' is an old-fashioned belief (now in some resurgence with hoeopathists) that the shape of a plant tells you which part of the body it can cure; for example, violets have heart shaped leaves and so were thought to be good for treating the heart - hence their old name of heartsease - similarly plants such as eyebright and lungwort gained an (unjustified?) reputation as being medicinal for a similar reason.

[chmpman]

Wow, that explanation made it so much better.

[white camellia]

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