My family

[tear_killer]

I have no family
a dad who dosnt care
2 sisters who hates you
a brother who killed him self
a over worked mother
and me so differnt from all of them
for at least for oneday
can we pretend to be a family.
.......just for once

[Kendall]

Yeah I do like it, it is straight to the point. If this is a personal poem, from like..life experience I think you should go deeper, and use maybe some personification or symbols, I really do like it. I would just like to see more detail and perhaps your emotion toward it. Neat though!

[WX6[ck]]

Good poem. Its being, yourself. If ya understand. I have the opposite of that poem and still im sad, so dont feel left out.

[fayefaye]

ow. that's sad. painful. truthful. good. is it true? uhm,... if it is, i'm real sorry bout ur brother.