Emotional Liberty - My Maiden Voyage,...

[DrDevious]

Eloquent, yet least expressive
Intelligent though most constrained
When the sagacious and the cognescenti congregate
Do They secretly admire the ignorant
...or can they see above the clouds ?



Ok so i know its short and the last sentence could be considered cliched,..but i kinda liked its naive simplicity.

Any comments appreciated.

[Riesa]

Is it supposed to be "Do They secretly admire the ignorant?"

Interesting little piece of writing though. :)

[DrDevious]

You're right it was supposed to be secretly,...how'd You know ?

...and thankyou for the comment.

[Virgil]

I find it well written and perhaps can agree with the feeling, Dr. but unsatisfying as a poem in the end. The sentiment is commonplace, even without the cliched last line. It just seems like it needs more.

[DrDevious]

Work in progress perhaps Virgil,...maybe i'll elongate...expand, deepen, widen or suchlike.

Thanks.