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[white camellia]

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[smilingtearz]

beautiful....

[white camellia]

beautiful....

Nice, smilingtearz! :)
It can make you feel that way, though i wrote it out of sadness.

[tn2743]

Very beautiful.

I like the phrase "believing it was real". You'd normally think that someone sniffing a flower in a painting would be 'pretending' that it was real. But he really believed that it was real. It leaves me asking myself whether he had such a desire to believe or perhaps it was the effect of a drug.

Though I don't understand the "echoing sound of black bat" bit. Why isn't it 'echoing sound of a/the black bat', or 'echoing sound of black bats"? Is it a black bat that you know so well, that 'black bat' has become a name? If so why isn't it in capital? I'm also puzzled about the "football". Sorry for asking so many questions, it's just that I want to understand this poem more. It's a very nice poem; and I like your style of writing very much.

[white camellia]

Is it a black bat that you know so well, that 'black bat' has become a name? If so why isn't it in capital?

I just forgot to capitalize it. :blush:


I'm also puzzled about the "football".

tn, It's footfall, not football. :p


Sorry for asking so many questions, it's just that I want to understand this poem more. It's a very nice poem; and I like your style of writing very much.

Thank you so, tn!

[tn2743]

tn, It's footfall, not football. :p


I'm so embarassed :blush: ...
Well, then there's nothing left now but a beautiful poem :)