ubiquitous

[white camellia]

... ... ...

[Virgil]

This is very lovely, Camilia. I think it is excellent. Such excellent lines:

a flow of Nature's words
tenderly dropt
on my favorite fringed skirt
and

then like a swing of bird
across your invisible hands
I take the Faith
with a pair of wings
to find your beautiful face
God, the more I read them the more I love those lines.

Mild comment: the opening lines are cliche-ish. a lover's breathing resonating inside their soul has been done to death. You might want to rethink that, and coming at the very beginning it might put someone off. But a very nice poem.

BTW, how do you know english so well, being that you're from China?

[Pensive]

Camellia, Great poetry by you!

I love the lines:

on my bare feet
You count my steps
when the Star
spares me
bits and pieces of her essence
a flow of Nature's words
tenderly dropt
on my favorite fringed skirt
resounding a sanctity You found
for me

[white camellia]

Mild comment: the opening lines are cliche-ish. a lover's breathing resonating inside their soul has been done to death. You might want to rethink that, and coming at the very beginning it might put someone off. But a very nice poem.

BTW, how do you know english so well, being that you're from China?

I did not realize the cliché ... :blush:

Do I know English so well? But English might know my love for her, especially English Poetry. :p
I never knew English before 1996, and I never actually wrote English poems before 2005, and isn't it a bit late?--it's been half a year for me to handle those lovely words! I've been feeling comfortable here with lit lovers ...
Lots of my Chinese contemporaries know English better than me ... The nation with an active atmosphere of plying this language, people are motivated when a number of friends from English speaking countries do contribute to this ...
I must be lying if I say that I'm apart from the atmosphere, but I have my own place to be all alone with English, savoring and wondering.

[Aurora Ariel]

when I hear the Choir a rise
above the twilight arch
I leave a light course
through the mellow acre
on my bare feet
You count my steps
when the Star
spares me
bits and pieces of her essence
a flow of Nature's words
tenderly dropt
on my favorite fringed skirt...

These lines are especially excellent. The flow is rather refined, and well-spaced. It's a lovely poem- nice work again!

[Virgil]

Do I know English so well? But English might know my love for her, especially English Poetry. :p
I never knew English before 1996, and I never actually wrote English poems before 2005, and isn't it a bit late?--it's been half a year for me to handle those lovely words! I've been feeling comfortable here with lit lovers ...
Lots of my Chinese contemporaries know English better than me ... The nation with an active atmosphere of plying this language, people are motivated when a number of friends from English speaking countries do contribute to this ...

Wow! Only ten years with english. I am very impressed.

P.S. I just looked up Chengdu and it sounds like a lovely place with deep culture. I had not heard of it before.

[white camellia]

P.S. I just looked up Chengdu and it sounds like a lovely place with deep culture. I had not heard of it before.

it IS a lovely place, Virgil, and that DEEP culture, though more and more modernized recently. "Thatched Cottage of Du Fu" is located here, Du Fu, one of the greatest poets in Tang Dynasty. And many other places like Wuhouci Temple, Emei Mountain(one of the four holy mountains of Buddhism in China, in Emei City near Chengdu), etc. Once a scholar called it "the eden of the east". :D
You can drop by with your dear wife and lovely Brandi someday-I could be your guide. I bet you will enjoy lots of food here. ;)