For Momma

[jon1jt]

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[MexThorn]

Good poem, i'm not good at figuring out poem meanings but I understood most of this one. I can't criticize but good job.

[genoveva]

This poem does a great job capturing detail and painting a scene. I really appreciate the childhood/family story here. What a good job keeping the rhyme! This is not easy. Two words stick out to me: traverses and demuirge (Is demuirge a word?). It may be worth keeping them in to keep the rhyme, but they did stick out of the natural flow, for me, when I read the poem.

[jon1jt]

DISREGARD.

[jon1jt]

This poem does a great job capturing detail and painting a scene. I really appreciate the childhood/family story here. What a good job keeping the rhyme! This is not easy. Two words stick out to me: traverses and demuirge (Is demuirge a word?). It may be worth keeping them in to keep the rhyme, but they did stick out of the natural flow, for me, when I read the poem.

The rhyme worked on this one - thanks for noticing - though it skips a beat here and there. Oh well. The childhood/family story is accurate. Mom was an aspiring ballet dancer and dad started his own shoemaker business right down the street. His business was on one end, my school on the other, three doors down, and the "oasis" was our backyard, which was full of trees, plants, bushes, and vines that reached up the backside of homes---something I don't see any longer on the 'modern' home, sadly.

The first time I ever heard of the word "demiurge" was reading Plato, I think his Timeaus refers to it. Demiurge in that Greek sense means something like a creative force that brings order from chaos. Traverse simply means to walk or travel over.

Thanks for lifting this poem out of the depths.