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Sindhu
10-24-2003, 04:45 AM
You went away.
I did not die.

Later I had biscuits and tea
And when it said they were tasty,
My heart did not lie.
Isagel
10-24-2003, 08:16 AM
This is very beautiful. Soft and calm.
Isagel
10-24-2003, 08:21 AM
Stupid, stupid me! :oops: Now I really put the title and the words together.
This poem hurts. It makes my throat ake.
fayefaye
10-24-2003, 08:42 AM
huh? i still think it' s beawdiful. (stupid, stupid me?)
Sindhu
10-24-2003, 10:53 PM
Stupid, stupid me! :oops: Now I really put the title and the words together.
This poem hurts. It makes my throat ake.
Thanks, Isagel- That WAS the EXACT reaction I was hoping for, but wasn't sure I would be able to evoke.
Sindhu
10-24-2003, 10:54 PM
huh? i still think it' s beawdiful. (stupid, stupid me?)
No, fayefaye, NOT "stupid you" . And thanks!
Dyrwen
10-24-2003, 11:48 PM
Hm. Suprisingly short, hard to critique anything just not exactly like your own work.. so, fine work. Heh.. Short and to the point.

The message "While you were away, I had biscuits and tea, and it was good."? That's about what I got out of it.. always a literalist.

On the random creative side, perhaps it's really a metaphorical inspiration of your love for life itself even when no one's around. Your heart knows it's good, because you know it's good. The way life just tastes better and is better, when you're alone to experience it. So long as you're alive, your heart never lies to you...

;)
Sindhu
10-24-2003, 11:51 PM
Hm. Suprisingly short, hard to critique anything just not exactly like your own work.. so, fine work. Heh.. Short and to the point.

;) Thanks! I think your ;) conveys the point!
Koa
10-25-2003, 01:15 PM
I like it but I'm not sure I get the point...
Sindhu
10-25-2003, 10:56 PM
I like it but I'm not sure I get the point...
Thanks! 've sent you a PM. ;)
Koa
10-26-2003, 08:23 AM
Yeah thanks. I like it even more now. Simple, quick and impressive.
fayefaye
10-26-2003, 08:27 AM
sad but good. thanks for the pm too, sindhu. )
rocksea
11-01-2003, 06:06 AM
i dont think therez anything to be shameful about this
what u tell is the truth
Sindhu
11-01-2003, 07:07 AM
Thanks! I agree that what I'm trying to say in the poem is true, it's only that I wish it was not always so!