Why the Heck????!!

[Countess]

Why the heck does no one give me feedback on my stuff? Is it so crappy you can't suffer it, or even worse, do you remained unmoved by it? Are you apathetic to its existence?

Please let me know. If it is so crappy you can't suffer it then I will work and try to improve my skills (indeed, I am always trying), but if you remain unmoved by it, I am going to quit writing entirely, because there is no hope for me.

Tanks,
C

[starrwriter]

I understand your frustration and I don't think your writing is crappy. Speaking only for myself, your novel in progress is simply not my cup of tea as far as subject matter is concerned. I prefer to critique writing style rather than choice of subject, which I think is entirely up to the author.

As for other members, the vast majority are very young and perhaps too inexperienced to comment on writing with adult themes. You may have noticed that a tiny percentage of the 8,000 members ever submits their own writing. This is largely a lurker/reader forum.

Don't get discouraged. Look around for other writer forums where you are more likely to get feedback on your work.

[Koa]

Personally, I just don't usually check the writing forums... I havent been on the personal poetry one for a while too... there's just no time to read all the stuff in the world...
(well I could start posting less but I'm a hopeless chatterbox)

[rachel]

Well here I come to save the day except I am just plain Rachel and not Mighty Mouse.
Like Koa I really haven't even wandered on to that section except once because being a writer I find it too stressful, it just reminds me I have to get off the computer and get writing.
But I was FASCINATED and not a little freaked out by that sub human Noctor. In a way she made me feel so sad and alone and as Messianic Jew I feel I could connect with her. And I hate vampires.
I think you could improve by going a little more slowly and developing each section. The first is awesome because you are at once plunged into the horror, the sorrow and emptiness of the heroine who thru no fault of her own has this come upon her. But in a way it is like all heros, they are always thrown into something they didn't ask for. The Lord of the Rings would not be the success it is were it not for a chance encounter in the Hobbit of Bilbo Baggins with a bunch of dwarves.
And when you say that this was going along until something happened that changed the course of history for the human race I would suggest you add to the suspence by chopping that one sentence off from all else and making it a statement by itself.
"And then something happened."
That really grips you.
Then the next two parts need a slower build up because the thoughts are very complex and the average reader will miss some important things along the way trying to hurry along with you. slow and easy and let the thoughts flow gently along because you have a great way of writing that doesn't need to be fast paced, it itself like Edgar Rice Burroughs does the scaring and heart pounding all by itself.
You have great promise. I would take a long time and be hard on yourself. You could have a best selling thriller on your hands. I found it easy to empathise with the heroine which is a MUST or you lose your audience.
and forgive me for not visiting that section.
perhaps you could go on another section and invite others to read your work. I think people like Digital and B-mental and Kilted and Stan and a kazillion others would enjoy every minute of it.
well done Countess. Please even if you go on another site for evaluation, don't leave us. we love you.

[Countess]

Thanks, you guys (and gal, Rachel) for your input. When I return to Black Panther I will revisit your comment here and implement what I can because they are sound.

I've also posted several poems in the poetry poem, but I suspect (from what people have told me) I can be a bit cryptic. That might account for the lack of commentary on that info.

Thanks to all!

C