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[RobinHood3000]

I'd recomment a Tiger Balm hot tub ;).

The "what should I say, I don't want to be retarded" line is a little odd, but otherwise, I like it.

[Pensive]

I'd recomment a Tiger Balm hot tub ;).

The "what should I say, I don't want to be retarded" line is a little odd, but otherwise, I like it.

Well, I know that it is full of mistakes. I wrote whatever came into my mind and then I was too lazy to change the poem, even I did not re-check it. :p

[Virgil]

Not bad pensive for a brain storm activity. But now it needs a little polish. The retarded line was awkward, I agree.

[Pensive]

I have just made some changes like replacing the "retarded" line and I have also added two more lines.

I hope that it is better than before.