The Countdown

[yellowfeverlime]

Staring at the ceiling
eyes blank
void of anything
nothing
counting the minutes until i die
1
2
3
4
5
I'm shaking


scared

freaking out

absolutely unaware

desperate

hopeless

12
13
14
15
I'm crying now

regretting

lying

punching

clenching

dreaming

22
23
24
Shattering myself

glass

goals

wishes

nothingness

30
31
32
33
34
left out

forgotten

desolate

hated

feared

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41
42
faking

lovely

fading

kicking

screaming

losing

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50
51
52
lost

last

seared

sealed

leaving

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59
Dead...

[yellowfeverlime]

Do you want me to block this 1 too.

[Logos]

:) no, like I wrote already, I never wrote anything about you having to "block" or not post your poems.

But I will move it to the Personal Poetry section ;)

[yellowfeverlime]

Wasn't it already in that section????

[Logos]

No, it was in "Poems, Poets and Poetry" where you discuss other people's poems. This is your poem, correct?

[yellowfeverlime]

Yes... oops... o well, is that that other website???? The one that takes you out of this 1????

[yellowfeverlime]

All of them are.

[blp]

Hey. This is really interesting in terms of the way it's laid out. You might be interested to have a look at work by Robert Duncan, Guillaume Apollinaire and John Cage for similarly inventive uses of the page space.

You might also like to look at Rimbaud. In terms of what you're expressing, you're ahead of the game having such a strong poetic ability to deal with these apparently awful feelings. A lot of severe depressives have no outlet at all. But it's not going to be enough if you just wallow in it. That would be a waste of your ability and of poetry in general. Poetry can also help you begin to understand your fascination with this kind of subject matter, and attempting to do that through poetry will also make the work better. At the moment you seem stuck in the mud. The point is, you could be going somewhere - and staying alive. 'Know thyself' said the delphic oracle to Oedipus. To this end, you'd also do well to get a really good analytic psychotherapist - someone who's not going to just slap you with a prescription for seroxat or take you through a lot of silly visualisations, but will take the time to talk and listen and help you get to a better understanding of what's driving you.

[samercury]

I like it (all poems actually). Just asking- Do you ever feel like you're dying or have you ever almost died (I have)... Just want to know

[yellowfeverlime]

yes, and i hate how the psycho-iatrist says "and how do you feel about that?" I just one to shove it.... yea...........
I love poetry that's confusing, especialy "The BrideGroom", by Johann Wolfgang von Goethe. It's really confusing. I also like the poem by Edgar Allen Poe, i believe it's "The Red Death." Really good.

[samercury]

I love confusing poems too :)

I almost died a lot of times but I never saw a psycho (my parents don't believe in them). How are they?

[yellowfeverlime]

Here, is another poem...link... i'll edit later.... help on PROJECT PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[samercury]

What do you need help with????

[yellowfeverlime]

Ummm........ How should i put it in order. I have
1)His life
2)Socialism (def's and stuff like that)
... let's talk about this on PROJECT DUE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! thread.
Lemme get it up...

[yellowfeverlime]

http://www.online-poetry.com/poem/188

[Ricardo_b]

I had never seen poem like this before. It works. It's thrilling. I especially like the fact that the words are not random as one may acknowledge at first, they are very well tought and positioned. Great!

[Nobody]

It is really well formed. I love it
5/5