cake mix

[amuse]

until i've seen
the northern
lights i won't
be satisfied
living in my city

until i've eaten
fugu i won't be
sated by sushi

until the forests
return i can't
sunbathe on
your deck
without guilt

when solar-powered
cars are mass
marketed
i may, just may
learn to drive

when beggars
say thank you
instead of cursing
food gifts
(because
they're not silver)
i may pause
to listen

when newborn
babies stop
dying because
their mums
avoid clinics
i will stop caring

until i can dance
on lakes and eat
cake batter
from volcanos
i will believe
in fairy tales

now that
i've heard you
laugh and cry
i believe in you.

after i am
ashes and dust
i'll still entreat you
to help save
marine otters
and giant pandas

until we help
mama earth heal
why should she
feed us?

[Darlin]

This is insightful and good and I like the easy rhythm. I especially love the first line, maybe because it reminds me a little bit of me. This is wistful and full of sad truths with a little bit of fantasy thrown in along with a powerful message. I wish more people could see as clearly and care. Very nice.

[amuse]

thank you. i don't come around as much as i used to, and it's nice to read commentary from new people. i really appreciate this and must say, from what i've read,you sound very nice and humane. i'm glad you enjoyed this, and a warm belated welcome to our neck of the woods. :)

[mono]

I think every time I read one of your poems, amuse, I learn a new word (this time, fugu: "Any of various poisonous fish related to the puffers that are used as food, especially in Japan, after the poisonous skin and organs have been removed." source (http://dictionary.reference.com/search?q=fugu)).
This specific work reads very uniquely, entrancing in a way that I cannot describe; and such a poem, I think, could carry on and on if you so desired with the hypothetical and imaginatively intriguing "if . . . then" statements.
The last stanza speaks the most loud, and wraps one of the most thought-provoking theses of any of your poems.
Beautifully done, amuse. ;)

[Darlin]

thank you. i don't come around as much as i used to, and it's nice to read commentary from new people. i really appreciate this and must say, from what i've read,you sound very nice and humane. i'm glad you enjoyed this, and a warm belated welcome to our neck of the woods. :)

You're welcome and thank you!