SleepyWitch
09-14-2005, 10:26 AM
Hey guys, I've revised chapter two of my novel. The new bits are in bold print (there's lots of new stuff on page 2).
you can find the old version at "General Writing - My novel- chapter 2".
PLEASE GIVE ME SOME FEEDBACK. thanks :) :) :)
here's a summary of the plot so far:
in chapter one, the VOICE of a girl wakes up in the body of another girl... they are at school.. in this chpater, the strange voice totally drowns out the girl's consciousness...
in the second chapter the girl goes home and is more or less herself.. at least the voice shuts up for most of the time but the girl is still disoriented and doesn't even recognise her own home...
nope, it's NOT a story about going nuts or something, even though it is a bit weird... i'll tell you more about the plot later on if you're interested. just judge that chapter in its own right ok
thanks
**** warning*********
PS: the nasty voice curses all the time, but that's only coz she's stuck in somebody elses body and doesn't know what's wrong.. she's nice, really (i hope it's not against forum rules???)
you can find the old version at "General Writing - My novel- chapter 2".
PLEASE GIVE ME SOME FEEDBACK. thanks :) :) :)
here's a summary of the plot so far:
in chapter one, the VOICE of a girl wakes up in the body of another girl... they are at school.. in this chpater, the strange voice totally drowns out the girl's consciousness...
in the second chapter the girl goes home and is more or less herself.. at least the voice shuts up for most of the time but the girl is still disoriented and doesn't even recognise her own home...
nope, it's NOT a story about going nuts or something, even though it is a bit weird... i'll tell you more about the plot later on if you're interested. just judge that chapter in its own right ok
thanks
**** warning*********
PS: the nasty voice curses all the time, but that's only coz she's stuck in somebody elses body and doesn't know what's wrong.. she's nice, really (i hope it's not against forum rules???)