Go-Go

[Isagel]

I imagine
you think you look silly
dancing around naked
in the living room like that,
doing the
shake- shake-shake
to make me smile
It isn´t just men that lose their
breath you know,
and I wish I could tell you
what I want to do
without sounding like
pornography,
but then again
maybe you wouldn´t mind.


(long time, nothing written. Glad to be back on the poetry page)

[mono]

How pleasant to see you back in this edge of the forum, Isagel! :nod:
The line-breaks (caesuras) seem in the perfect places, especially the "doing the" from the "shake-shake-shake." With each line, it flows beautifully, almost like beat poetry with light music in the background.
Otherwise, I must admit, the poem made me laugh aloud to where my housemates and cats looked strangely at me. :lol:

[Nightshade]

you know what I lik best Isagel its that it is such a happy poem and full of life even the what do you call it the sound of it without the words just ace!!!:D
Ps I hope its not too long before you write somthing else)

[chispa]

Nice poem Isagel!

[Isagel]

Thank you all very much.

I´m not very used to write humorous things, but I liked doing it - so I´m very glad you found it funny! Mono and Nightshade - it was very nice to hear that you liked the rythm.

[amuse]

how vibrant, and how lucky you are!

what an appreciative, humorous, and freshly seductive poem.
:thumbs_up

[Isagel]

Indeed, I am very lucky. :D
And your comments are very much appreciated. They are as generous and thoughtfully expressed as ever. I only wish I could comment poetry like you do it.