Interlude of This Love

[Avalive]

Interlude of This Love

For the weaknesses we hold are our goodness
Us defying the merits magnifies great stupidity
Shy to be kind, kind to be killed, kill the truthfulness
Between the first kiss and the last faithfulness
The rest, covertly, all became unloving touch

[Koa]

i like it...the language feels very high and deep - i don't know why i was expecting something longer, but instead it's short and good like that.
I like the 3rd line best, but thinking about it the following ones are really good too and follow very well - oh, and good end...the kiss that becomes faithfulness that becomes just hidden boredom... very realistic.

[Jay]

I like the rhythm, the way it reads, of the 3rd and 4th lines.

[Avalive]

Thank you both for reading it