Legends Re-told - "Ramayana"

[starrdarcy]

Hi i'm new here!

Anyways, like i was saying, i am redoing a old epic called the Ramayana. I'm sure most have heard about it, so i will keep talking.

My new version is very different from the old one in some ways. The setting, time, theme are all kept, but they have been altered to go with the times. I would like to post a quote from my first chapter, but not right now. See you all later!

[starrdarcy]

Sorry i have been gone for a little, well i said i would supply the chpters of the "Legends Re-told - Ramayana" here it is! feel free to ask questions.

Chapter One
Ayodhya

It was a sunny day in the beautiful city of Ayodhya. There was not a cloud in sight and the blazing sun gave everything below a glow. On the highway just west in the outskirts of the city, the sunny skies and light breeze made driving very pleasant. Dasaratha, the owner of Kosala Inc. was driving to work on his daily commute from the urban sprawl of neighboring Tuscany valley. He was ready for work at and looking professional. His black suit, gold necklace, and tie. He turned on the radio to his favorite station. A soft voiced man was on,
“good morning everyone, this is 1190 Easy FM Ayodhya easy listening station, on a beautiful Monday morning, the temperature for the city is 20, and were expecting sun, sun, and more sun, for this week. Your listening to the morning show with Al and Al. This morning were talking about the corporate success of Kosala Inc.”
“Yes, Al. Kosala Inc. is another sign of India’s fast growing economy, and business scene. In fact Kosala Inc. is top one hundredth fastest growing company in India according to the Business Weekly Magazine. I bet the stockholders are happy about that Al.”
“That’s true, I own some shares and I make money off the company every day. Lets hope Kosala continues to grow.”
“Well Al, it’s time again to see what’s happening on the roads of Ayodhya, here’s Tom to tell us what’s happening with the morning commute to work.”
“Hello Al and Al. Well its an average morning commute, we have the I-23P backed up for a little, and some traffic on the highway-12 by-pass. As for-.”
Dasaratha turned off the radio, and put the top down on his Parvati. The rush of cool air was a refreshing feeling. As he got closer to the City of Ayodhya, the tall business towers of the city, especially those of the Kosala Center seemed to reach for the heavens. The city core of Ayodhya was beautiful, there was medium sized trees that doted the sides of every sidewalk, and countless gardens that lay on the side of the road, the many shops, and stores. Each were decorated on the outside to fit in with the theme of the city core, a traditional 2010 era style of building, with large arches, pillars, bold colors and fake facades.
Dasaratha turned off the main road and stopped at a StarBucks for some coffee, as he parked his car and got, people waved to him. In Ayodhya people are generally friendly, and give hospitality to one another, even strangers are given a warm welcome when the enter the city. This gave the city a small town feeling. Most of Ayodhya knew Dasaratha, the Dasaratha Family, and there business, Kosala Inc. After all, quite a few people who lived in Ayodhya worked for him. Dasaratha usually went to StarBucks on his way to work to have his morning coffee, his favorite was Double Espresso, with some whip cream on top. He grabbed his briefcase and walked into the store, some people who were sitting at a table by the front window waved to him, some others smiled, Dasaratha smiled back to them. Before he got to the front till, a lady called Merila looked at him and said,
“Hello Dasaratha, the usual?”
“No, lets try something different today Merila, I try the Americano with a extra shot of caffeine.”
“Sure, I get it ready. Just to let you know its very strong.”
“That’s all right, I’ll need it for today.”
“Big day for you? What’s happening?”
“I am having some people come over from a few other companies for a stock market, and strategy meeting. Its very important and demanding.”
“Well here you go Dasaratha, hope you enjoy you Americano, and good luck at the meeting.”
“Thank you Merila, see you later.” Dasaratha paid at the till, and walked over to an empty table near the front window. He set his American on the table, and took out his PMC from his briefcase. He sipped his coffee as he turned it on. He checked his stock portfolio, it was doing well. He made $35,000 overnight from the companies he invested into. He then paged his stock advisor, and personal consultant, a person came on the screen, his name was Vasistha,
“Hello Vasistha, how are you doing?”
“Doing well sir, and you?”
“Well just at my usual morning coffee stop. Vasistha could you tell me which companies to look out for, and if there good, which ones I should invest into?”
“Yes, There are a few interesting companies today, Federated, Mithila Layers, and a big jumper this morning was IMP Co. I would invest in all of them. If you only want to invest into one only, the best choice would have to be Federated. IMP Co. is a higher mover than Federated, but there could be a slump after such a big gain earlier this morning.”
“What’s Federated shares worth, is $3267.34 a share sir.”
“Buy 150 Federated shares. Put 35 of them into my Portfolio, as locked shares. Thanks Vasistha.”
“Talk to you later Dasaratha, I’ll keep a close watch on your investments.”
Dasaratha was putting his PMC away, when his pagers gave a beep. He looked at, it was his Manthara. He turned the display on.
“Dasaratha, the gentlemen from the other companies you called for are here, there ready for you stock market, and strategy meeting. They have been here for a few minutes.”
“I’ll be right over Manthara, tell them to wait and I’m going to be there soon. I can’t let anything effect that meeting with those gentleman.”
“All right, I will tell them. See later Dasaratha.”
Dasaratha quickly drank his Americano, and grabbed his briefcase as he walked out the door towards his car. He got out his vehicle remote, and started the Parvati. The car’s AI voice came on,
“Welcome to Parvati Tamil, user Dasaratha.”
He got in and put his fingers on a small screen for identification. He put the car on auto pilot. The AI voice came on again,
“Were is your destination?”
Dasaratha responded,
“To Kosala Center, parkade 1-A, space 14, Dasaratha. As soon as possible.”
“Destination request complete.”
The car gave a sharp jolt, Dasaratha sat back in his seat tensely. Then the car gave itself max acceleration and pulled out of the parking lot, it did a sharp turn. Then the car paused for a moment. Dasaratha relaxed in his seat. Then without warning the car accelerated itself down to a intersection and skidded to a abrupt stop. Some people in a car beside him looked at him funny. He sank down in his seat. When the light was green, the car took off. As it drove down the highway, the Parvati did sharp passes around other ongoing cars, and accelerated often, barely missing other cars. When the car approached the exit that went to the Dasaratha Centers, it accelerated and crossed three lanes, pulling in front of two cars trying to get into the exit as well, they honked there horns. When the Parvati got into the exit, the car didn’t slow down, it raced down the viaduct and tunnels heading towards Kosala Inc. Dasaratha’s car did its act again of passing cars, and speeding past others. The car reached the check-in booth that was at the entrance to the parkade, Dasaratha sat up and sighed in relief. But the reckless drive was not over yet, as soon as the computer check-in booth gave the signal to go, the Parvati did a burn-out and sped off leaving behind two tire marks, and a cloud of smoke. People who were near by looked at Dasaratha, and raised there eyebrows in disbelief. The Parvati raced through the parkade corridors, missing other cars passing. The Parvati got up final level were Dasaratha’s parking spot was, the car stopped at the entrance. Dasaratha tried again to sit up again. The car revved a little, then accelerated again down the parkade, he was thrown back in his seat. As the Parvati accelerated, the speedometer reached speeds of over 100 Km/h. Just ahead, a SUV started to pull out, Dasaratha closed his eyes and covered his face with his hand. The Parvati quickly swerved around the SUV and continued to drive. The parking spot could be seen, the car gave itself one last push, and Just before reaching the end, it did a turn and brake at the same time. The car’s rear end swerved around and skidded to an abrupt stop, the Parvati was perfectly parked in its spot. Dasaratha was clinging on to his briefcase, he relaxed in his seat and said out loud to himself,
“What a ride, that’s ASAP.” He got out of the car. One of the people who stood and watched Dasaratha drive into the parking lot said, but not loud,
“show off.”
Another person who was watching said,
“Dasaratha has all the right moves when it comes to business, I guess the same applies when he’s driving.”
Dasaratha stepped out of his car and acted as if everything was normal. Some people who watched him as he drove into the parkade said,
“Hi.” In a surprised and shocked way.
Dasaratha shyly responded,
“Hi.” As he walked past them.
Four of Dasaratha’s personal body guards were waiting at the entrance of the corridor leading top the plaza. He met up with them. Dasaratha, and his body guards walked down a long glass corridor to the main indoor plaza, many people that he walked by smiled, waved, or said hi to him. Dasaratha looked outside as he walked, three towering glass monstrosities sparkle reflections of the sky in the bright light, there was two new Kosala towers; four, and five being constructed down below, and was due to be completed in 2 years, by late 2201. Dasaratha reached the main inner plaza. The high glass ceilings, tall pillars, and the massive size of the plaza was breathtaking. They walked for a little while until he reached the main plaza desk, there were a few people working at the there. A women called Janita who was there smiled and said,
“Good, morning Dasaratha.”
“Good morning to you Janita, I have a very important meeting that I am supposed to be at, could you page Manthara, and the stock market, and strategy meeting that I have just arrived and I’m coming up very soon.”
“Can do, I will page Manthara, and the meeting, to tell them your here and coming very soon.”
“Thank you Janita, see you later.”
Janita smiled back and then went back to work. Dasaratha, and his body guards then walked over to one end of the plaza were the elevators, and building-to-building transports were. They walked to one of many elevators that service One Kosala Center. As he approached elevator 14-A, there was Manthara, and two of her body guards waiting for them, they smiled and greeted Dasaratha, and Manthara said,
“Your stock market, and strategy meeting delegates are waiting for you, I will take you to them, Dasaratha.”
Dasaratha, Manthara and there body guards entered into the elevator. The glass doors shut behind them and they were lifted up the tower to the meeting.

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