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tonywalt
05-07-2026, 11:20 AM
In the stunned heat of
a day in July
A woman is leaning from
the fifth-floor window
vodka at elbow
she watches the evening
rob the yellow from this day

she checked in 2 days ago
her breathing has changed
from panicky
to shallow, to normal

across the highway a heron
standing on one leg
is lost in thought
letting the world go by
as it must

she carries the vodka to bed
lifts the glass and drinks
listening to the electric buzz of insects
tires humming over concrete
planes moving through time zones

it is the time to kill time
lying back on the bed
she lights a cigarette

the stillness of a hotel painting
looks placidly her way
sensing the evening shadows
lengthening across the room.

tailor STATELY
05-07-2026, 12:51 PM
Interesting tension in this vignette. Enjoyed :)

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor

tonywalt
05-07-2026, 03:28 PM
Interesting tension in this vignette. Enjoyed :)

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor

decent review. Thanks Tailor.

Danik 2016
05-08-2026, 11:17 PM
Enjoyed the poem, Tony. Here the loneliness and the ennui seems to be less uncomfortable than in other recent poems.

tonywalt
05-12-2026, 01:15 PM
Enjoyed the poem, Tony. Here the loneliness and the ennui seems to be less uncomfortable than in other recent poems.

thank Danik. I have always plannned to write more comfortable poetry, but then emails, groceries and a bunch of other stuff just get in the way.

Danik 2016
05-12-2026, 11:06 PM
Lol! Modern life and good modern poetry are uncomfortable, I guess, Tony.