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tonywalt
06-21-2025, 09:00 PM
This morning, I sat at the kitchen table,
coffee mug fogging my glasses,
deciding to write a poem:
melody instead of meaning

I began with Miles Davis:
short lines, cool as the rim of the cup,
spaces between thoughts
where the silence mattered more
than anything I might say.

Then I shifted to Springsteen,
rolling up my sleeves,
telling stories of factory towns and lovers
under rusted water towers—
a harmonica wailing between the stanzas.

A Bach fugue made the next attempt intricate,
lines folding over themselves,
a theme in one voice,
answered and answered again
until the poem sounded smarter than I am.

For a moment I tried heavy metal—
all caps, no punctuation—
but the poem frightened the dog
and rattled something loose in the pantry.

A country ballad came easier:
a lost truck, a lost love,
ol’ hound gone missin’ again
repeating every few stanzas
because some things you never stop missing.

Finally, I settled into a soft bossa nova,
each line leaning slightly to the right,
the rhythm of the ceiling fan
keeping time overhead,
a poem you could sip slowly, like wine.

Hours spent, the page
a scatter of almost-thoughts—
the usual drift
toward nothing.

Danik 2016
06-22-2025, 07:46 AM
Enjoyed very much specially the inclusion of bossa nova. You have the gift of making much with simple words.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_8_iQn9YgKs

tailor STATELY
06-22-2025, 11:19 AM
Eclectic music tastes ! "Hours spent, the page / a scatter of almost-thoughts— / the usual drift / toward nothing." The thoughts of most poets I'm sure... but it's worth it :)

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor

tonywalt
06-22-2025, 01:45 PM
Enjoyed very much specially the inclusion of bossa nova. You have the gift of making much with simple words.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_8_iQn9YgKs

Thanks Danik!