Dumb Women

[apstudent]

OK, someone told me earlier to try a funny poem, so here it goes. However, I am 18 and the only thing currently on my mind is girls, so I will right on the female gender in general.

Females


I need a female,
to fetch me my ale,
I need a girl,
to clean my whole world,
So why do they run,
when I'm just having fun,
Why do they go,
I'll never know,
Actually I do,
Its cause of girls like all of you,
Hate guys like me,
Who like to live free,
Its cause I have not enough green,
Or your just plain mean.
Whatever it is,
just know this,
I DON'T LIKE YOU EITHER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I know, its dumb, give me your worst.

[Phoenix_Tears]

On my suggestion....... -_-

well, i would like it if i were male, i am not so i am just going to say it is a good poem. i mean it could be cruder!but i personally prefer to live free. freedom and independance above all save religion.

p.s. any1 got aim??

[tjg1098]

It's an alright poem, but your grammar, spelling, and sentence mechanics leave something to be desired. Clean that up, and it's pretty good, as well as funny.

[apstudent]

Come on now, there are like twenty views and two votes. Come on people, just vote real quick. You can't offend me.

[Shuai]

Hey everyone. I haven't been here in a long time, but now I'm back. As to the poem, I have a problem with word choice. The poem in general doesn't flow very well. On the scale of one to ten, I would give it a 6.4.

[apstudent]

6.4, huh, in my mind it was more like a 6.549, but that is just me. As for the word choice, I wrote this poem in less than two minutes, so I probably could have made it with better word choice and a bit more humor, but thanx for responding and voting.