Sinking(please read)

[Phoenix_Tears]

Sinking
Harder and harder the acid rain falls
Burning me through the walls of stone
Is anyone there? I am so alone
I am a lost child in a sea of madness
I am being pulled out by the tides of sadness
I reach for salvation
But i am lost sinking into my own damnation
I am drowning in pain!
I have nothing to lose and nothing to gain
I hear silence no noise! It is too loud!
I cannot see a sun behind dread's gray cloud
Is anyone there?
I am sinking into hell!
I am still lying where I fell
Can anyone hear me?
Help me I am sinking! It cannot be!

[Nevolia]

Dude, another nice poem, very sad tho, sorry i can't offer ne more inight into how u can fix it and stuff (maybe cuz itz just that good)....Good job :P

[Matt]

Agreed. great poem PT. A little sad for my tastes, but excellent regardless.

Found a great avitar image of a phoenix if you want it.

[tear_killer]

um....uh.....cool...i think........J/K its pretty,lol.