Windows

[symphony]

The city somehow looks greyer on lazy afternoons.
Concrete stands
facing concrete.
A silent edifice
eyes another
with its hundred eyes: All showing glimpses of life
rarely chanced.
The sudden monologue of a crow breaks through
the slow yellow.
The absence
of motion rings
its presence
throughout the gallery of windows one after another.
And the gods of
miracles and wonder
are past, only this--
geometry put
to careful display, exposed to a lifeless pose—remains.
Poised and planned.
One cannot build.
Will not create.
One can only stare
through one’s window and see more windows there.

March 31, 'o8

[Virgil]

Symphony, youi're really scaring me with how good you've become. Wow, this is excellent. I love the imagery, I love the pacing rhythm, I love the form. The language kind of puts the reader in this weird world of looking through windows as if it were the entire sterile world. It kind of makes one feel like a voyeur. This is so good:

And the gods of
miracles and wonder
are past, only this--
geometry put
to careful display, exposed to a lifeless pose—remains.
Poised and planned.
One cannot build.
Will not create.

[symphony]

why does poetry have to come in my life whenever there're exams ahead?! they were only windows, for heaven's sake.

[firefangled]

Originally Posted by symphony

why does poetry have to come in my life whenever there're exams ahead?! they were only windows, for heaven's sake.

True, Symphony, they were only windows, but you are a poet.

"Only" anything does not stand a chance of remaining ordinary in your eyes.

Excellent poem.

[ahsiam]

thats really wonderful!
i like last few lines very much with first three ones.actually i liked the theme much. you made a beauty with your words.

[symphony]

Originally Posted by Virgil

Symphony, youi're really scaring me with how good you've become.

Why does that sound like i was bad before?

Originally Posted by firefangled

True, Symphony, they were only windows, but you are a poet.

"Only" anything does not stand a chance of remaining ordinary in your eyes.

Hmmm.
It's just that I cant afford to have that "poet" in me at times.

Originally Posted by ahsiam

thats really wonderful!
i like last few lines very much with first three ones.actually i liked the theme much. you made a beauty with your words.

Thanks.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Originally Posted by symphony

why does poetry have to come in my life whenever there're exams ahead?! they were only windows, for heaven's sake.

Here is the answer to your TERRIBLE quandary, dear child: Make writing poetry your solemn obligation, and you will doubtless seize ecstatically on writing exams instead.

[Sweets America]

I love it! This is well-written!! The ending is great, and the form interesting as well.

[symphony]

Originally Posted by PrinceMyshkin

Here is the answer to your TERRIBLE quandary, dear child: Make writing poetry your solemn obligation, and you will doubtless seize ecstatically on writing exams instead.

Hmm i've got a bouncy pen lately. Been writing some bengali stuff too down here. I can feel the poetry-fever.

Originally Posted by Sweets America

I love it! This is well-written!! The ending is great, and the form interesting as well.

hey guess what? i love it too!

[Xillus_Xavier]

I agree with everyone else. This is very good.

[symphony]

why thank you!

[Pendragon]

One very interesting image is that of the monologue crow declaiming from a viewpoint upon a lightning rod or tree branch, perhaps addressing one of your windows! Well done!

[Pensive]

Wow, beautiful poem, symphony! I have really loved the rhythm it possesses.

And the gods of
miracles and wonder
are past, only this--
geometry put
to careful display, exposed to a lifeless pose—remains.

This has got to be my favourite part.

[amanda_isabel]

i loved it

i can so realte to the whole poetry fever along with exams. i've even had to write poems in the middle of taking some.. (whether they're any good is another thing, though, lol)

[formality hater]

Very well composed,indeed!