Lost Childhood

[Spring Blossom]

This is a poem I have written. I know it's not very good, but I'd like some feedback.

Lost Childhhod

I have been swept away
by the winds of time,
while the little girl I once was
is left behind.
With her are innocence,
ignorance and fun.

Part of me died at
the start of yeat eight.
Replaced by rejection,
uncertainty and hate.
Now more than ever,
I yearn to be young.

My childhood is almost gone
ripped from me by time's cruel hand.
Now the remnants slip through my fingers,
the last grains of sand.
The bitter-sweet taste of adulthood
on my tongue.

[jitendra]

Good one. the more we know about the world instead of growing love for everybody we grow hatred.

[Shakira]

A Gr88888 poem. Anythng else wriiten by you ?????

[Spring Blossom]

Yes there are a few more. I'm glad you like it! But I'll have to post them later, I'm already late!

[spally]

i really like your poem. i have one that i haven't posted yet that is very much like yours. i'd like to read some more of your work.

[Spring Blossom]

I have three other poems (but they don't rhyme and i don't like them quite as much ) I will post them in other threads, they're called "Average Families", "Never been kissed" and "Rollercoaster".