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  1. 02-17-2012, 06:19 PM #1
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    Sparkie

    I stood half dressed under
    the waning crescent,
    exposed to flashes of his
    brilliant light.
    I can fix your problem
    So I let his deft hands do their work,
    bewildered at my powerlessness.
    Yet in my heart I knew
    our midnight encounter
    would bear no receipt.
    I trembled.
    Nobody would find a record
    that we ever knew each other.
    My guilty conscience spoke
    This is off the books isn't it?
    He pocketed the cash smiling.
    You already blew one fuse tonight honey'.
    Who understands men, I thought,
    as he prepared to leave me.
    Why blow another?
    Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb
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  2. 02-17-2012, 08:50 PM #2
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    you write with so many undercurrents I am bashed upon this shore and thats not to mention the shellgrit . you are a f ucking genius in your own vegimite.

    Now knobbly knees hill has pissed off (come back Hill, for christsake) we are old skool (pre wolf days) lol . soon we will be gone.

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  3. 02-17-2012, 09:07 PM #3
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    Damn! shoulda used undercurrents in the poem too!
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  4. 02-18-2012, 05:03 AM #4
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    No, you shouldn't, Delta, they're better unnamed; as much as I thought of some of your other poems "wow, this one is her best", Sparkie IS so exceptional, that it's beyond any listings and all alone shining even when that night's crescent is lost in the dawning sun. Great applause from -

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  5. 02-18-2012, 03:20 PM #5
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    Terrific, ironic, double-entendre(ish), brilliant, and hilarious. (I've run out of superlative adjectives.)

    Quote Originally Posted by Jerrybaldy View Post

    soon we will be gone.
    I hope to hell you don't mean that.


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    I'm using, and I almost demolished the LitNet!
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  6. 02-18-2012, 05:46 PM #6
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  7. 02-18-2012, 06:16 PM #7
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    lol. Thanks MM. Glad everyone understood the double meaning of the poem too!
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  8. 02-20-2012, 04:48 PM #8
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    bump!
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