Not the end, after all

[SleepyWitch]

Feedback, please?

Not the end, after all

11 a.m. in the shade of the museum pillars,
Human Rights etched into smooth white stone.
The drowsy city stirs, cool prelude to a searing day.
As yet, the streets are ours –
morning debriefing on the transience of earthly love.
What would the Renaissance masters make of us?

- - The weary soldier reclining under a sycamore tree,
an adoring nymph draped across his chest
while placid donkeys and parrots look on in the fading light.
Miles amorosus et puella conflagrata.
Or a more modern version: Herzog and Krüger –
the best of vagrant lechery for your entertainment, since 1998.
Duke and Potter: Lost Labour tops the album charts. - -

You smile wryly and we set out.
Another café that smells of old people,
uncomfortable reminder of the passing years.
You are oblivious.
“You can’t break up. I need you around.” you say with a gulp
and that settles it.
Outside, the ant-like shoppers stare.
You have to go and mow the lawn, jog and … stuff,
a to-do list long enough to wrap the void at the centre of the galaxy.
A challenge in the glitter of your eyes, lips curled in a subtle smirk.
“Not here!” you say.
So I salute you,
soldier without a war.

[Danik 2016]

I liked it. Modernist touch. Conspicous canario.Tried to imagine what city is this

[SleepyWitch]

I liked it. Modernist touch. Conspicous canario.Tried to imagine what city is this

Thanks

Hehe, what city do you think it is?

[Dreamwoven]

Birkenhead?

[SleepyWitch]

Birkenhead?

Haha, no Birkenhead isn't that glamorous.

[Danik 2016]

No, maybe Paris or New York. Museum, old cafés.Not London, I think!

[SleepyWitch]

No, maybe Paris or New York. Museum, old cafés.Not London, I think!

Hehe, could be, I guess.
If you really want to know, you could google it. There are some very specific details in the poem.

[Dreamwoven]

Haha, no Birkenhead isn't that glamorous.

Oh, it has to be glamorous!

[SleepyWitch]

Oh, it has to be glamorous!

Huh? Why?

[Dreamwoven]

Its often the less well-known that are more interesting to learn about. There should have been a question mark at the end of my post, not an exclamation mark...

[SleepyWitch]

Its often the less well-known that are more interesting to learn about. There should have been a question mark at the end of my post, not an exclamation mark...

True. But the poem still isn't set in B'head