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    You Raped My Mind

    A poem inspired by a disturbering dream I had, which stuck out in my mind for being so unlike any dream I had before.

    You Raped My Mind

    It haunts me still
    the violence of the dream
    so unreal, and yet so
    inescapable.

    It daunts me to recall
    the hard metallic taste
    that I cannot alleviate
    from my mind.

    It was something
    raw and impure
    passionless
    and yet there was
    an unavoidable need
    for nothing more than
    the friction of two bodies.

    I was repulsed
    yet convicted
    covered in dirty
    shame and the memory
    of teeth marks upon
    flesh a strange
    surreal bareness.

    It was not attraction
    but grotesque
    and I woke feeling
    near shattered
    wishing I could
    wash my mind away.

    The thought
    of it ransacks
    my senses,
    this ugly undisguised
    lust the feeling of being
    possessed
    throwing myself into it.

    A thing devoid of pleasure
    but boiled down
    to a simple wanting
    a need to be ripped
    apart.

    Like magnetic fields
    pulled together
    pushed apart
    the irresistible
    rejected
    rebel soul
    you were
    no matter
    your wretchedness
    my inner resistance.

    It was not about us
    it was undisclosed
    undisguised
    so I could see only
    the hideousness inside
    and give into your
    brutality.

    Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before. ~ Edgar Allan Poe

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    Yes, very disturbing; perfected in your intimate style.

    I would expect physical, as well as emotional, scars from this dreamscape (lifted from wikipedia: "The "dream world" within a dream"".
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    It was one of the few moments I have had a dream vividly in my mind days after though it is starting to fade now, it left a very stark and uncomftrable impression.

    Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before. ~ Edgar Allan Poe

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    I have had a few dreams where i too have been left thinking about it for days afterwards with it fresh in my mind. It does slowly begin to fade away, but its vividness is so strange. I woke up almost crying.

    I think your poem conveys a kind of urgency and fear. A very good ode to that kind of dream, dark and twisted.
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    DM, these kinds of dreams, if I may, come from some hidden corners of our lower psyche, usually in connection with an unconscious guilt feeling thus justifying itself and coming to awareness for us to.... to get rid of it. It's a kind of elimination process dream, and - good riddings!
    Take an energizing shower, go for a walk, don't accept to give the dream too much importance. Sometimes it simply results from ill digestion, so "my" golden rule here again is - refuse to feed the dark and dirty by focussing on it, "don't contemplate Sodom and Gommorah"! go forward and reconnect with your beautiful YOU!
    I hope you don't mind this "introduction".

    But back to your poem, it reads vivid and impressive! And faithful to your style indeed.

    Be well, DM, and shake off the disgust! disregard if you can.

    Best wishes to you - Bar

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    I found that the free-verse, short lines form of it distracting, obliging me to feel emphasis again and again when I'd rather have concentrated on the content. Would you consider setting this up as a prose poem?

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    Quote Originally Posted by PrinceMyshkin View Post
    I found that the free-verse, short lines form of it distracting, obliging me to feel emphasis again and again when I'd rather have concentrated on the content. Would you consider setting this up as a prose poem?
    I do not think that prose style poetry would really suit the content of this poem. The use of the short lines conveys the starkness of the subject matter and refelcts the mindset and emotion in which the poem is being written in.

    Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before. ~ Edgar Allan Poe

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    Hi Muse
    Very evocative poem and like many poems I enjoy and am intrigued by I read it several times. On a positive slant - if you hadnt suffered the dream you would not have been able to write the poem.
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