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    Fireworks in your eyes

    You told me about the “grand finale”:
    Dozens of fireworks launched all at once,
    in the sky;
    the light burning into the eyes´ memory,
    rapid explosions echoing throughout the body
    creating short gasps of breath.
    If you know the secret,you said,
    You must look away, for a moment,
    from the instantly blooming flowers of light,
    at your lover´s eyes,
    there you will see the blossoms,
    reflected
    in exquisitely delicate miniature;
    the look upon the faces reveals
    the innocence and wonder of childhood,
    and shows you
    a part of beauty,
    you have rarely seen
    and should never forget
    Last edited by chispa; 07-15-2005 at 11:06 PM.

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    I too had a sad sad (repitition for emphasis) experience of waking up to find lit fireworks petruding from my eyes

    I felt that this 'personal' experience could be used as poetry too.

    Fireworks, fireworks, they burn my eyes so
    I wonder who did this, i want to know
    But alas, I cannot see, just like pies (similie)
    Because i have two fireworks, stuck in my eyes

    Short, yet conveys wrought emotion.

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    ok, it is nice to see that!

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