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    ~Sand~

    The breakwalled harbor
    holds sea-locked lives
    as docklines stretch, then sag,
    stretch, then sag
    on the moon-sucked surge.

    Mary tends a seaside bar, mends wounds,
    dodges brawls. She escorts
    the drowned and found to their graves.
    The drowned and lost
    langour in her dreams.

    Fuel-dock Harry
    rolls out hose, tops-off tanks,
    ices the holds. Corporate pockets
    take the cash. Harry
    shut it down one day
    with a two-barrel blast in his shack.

    Harbor master Jim, widowed
    now, patrols the dusk-dim
    moorings abob in his wake
    as complaints of gulls
    land on cormorants black as dread.
    They dive, beak death
    to minnows and silver needlefish.

    Bouy bells clong and clang
    socked in a shawl of fog.
    A raft of kelp, with its crew of flies,
    shades a shale-toothed reef
    as I watch phosphorescent swells
    pilfer the helpless shore,

    and this saddens me at times,
    as I walk the beach,
    feel the sand,
    the mountain it had been,
    being pulled from around my feet
    to lie for eternity beyond the light.
    Last edited by DanBierce; 11-10-2009 at 10:59 AM.
    "People who believe a lot of crap are better off." Charles Bukowski

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    Dan, this is astounding from the first line to the last. The language and descriptive details fit like a well crafted slip.

    Excellent! One of those I can read over and over just to hear the sound of it.

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    Wow... I'm at a loss. This is one of the most phenomenal poems I have EVER read on here! This is just a gorgeous work of art and I feel compelled to post it in the "favorite poems by lit-netters" thread. Just superb; the rhythm, the energy, the imagery, the lush language...
    "As far as we can discern, the sole purpose of human existence is to kindle a light of meaning in the darkness of mere being." --Carl Gustav Jung

    "To absent friends, lost loves, old gods, and the season of mists; and may each and every one of us always give the devil his due." --Neil Gaiman; The Sandman Vol. 4: Season of Mists

    "I'm on my way, from misery to happiness today. Uh-huh, uh-huh, uh-huh, uh-huh" --The Proclaimers

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    Wow, guys--Thanks! I'm delighted the poem works so well for you.
    "People who believe a lot of crap are better off." Charles Bukowski

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    Yes very good Dan. I was glued to it. I particularly liked this stanza:
    Fuel-dock Harry
    rolls out hose, tops-off tanks,
    ices the holds. Corporate pockets
    take the cash. Harry
    shut it down one day
    with a two-barrel blast in his shack.
    I enjoyed the sounds of that.
    LET THERE BE LIGHT

    "Love follows knowledge." – St. Catherine of Siena

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    Haunting! Captivating! Enjoyable! Encore, encore!
    Some of us laugh
    Some of us cry
    Some of us smoke
    Some of us lie
    But it's all just the way
    that we cope with our lives...

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    yes, captivating... i was there, in the fog; melancholy and eclectic.

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    Thanks, Virgil, Pendragon, and Cogs. Glad you enjoyed. I have enjoyed tinkering with this poem over the years.
    "People who believe a lot of crap are better off." Charles Bukowski

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