Results 1 to 3 of 3

Thread: Gratuitous Love

  1. #1
    Registered User
    Join Date
    Jun 2013
    Posts
    547

    Gratuitous Love

    Super Market tabloid covers could never bare
    Essence of my dame's, callous grace, so de rigueure
    As diligent cashier, price checked qualities, my value to compare
    You took stock, then left your doting suitor only a trite share
    I cashed out all the insignificant baggage you bade me pare
    But you only left me a blank check, and an indebted heart to bear
    Your dedicated stock boy tendered only the finest wares
    But you flippantly post-marked each, return, my truant bill to flare
    Stacked my Deli case with fleshy cuts lean and rare
    Your dark, glassy eyes refracted a shrill, piercing glare
    Each, bulging shelf, I garnished with the greatest care
    But your refined, decadent desire could not coyly ensnare
    As gourmet baker, for your palate prepared sweet, sumptuous fair
    But my decorous, rich platter did not with your delicate buds pair
    Last edited by virtuoso; 06-20-2013 at 11:41 AM.

  2. #2
    confidentially pleased cacian's Avatar
    Join Date
    Nov 2011
    Location
    London
    Posts
    13,930
    very nice virtuoso I like the way it reads . absolutely fantastic!!

    ''As gourmet baker, for your palate prepared sweet, sumptuous faire
    But my decorous, rich platter did not with your delicate buds pair''


    very nice lines !!! I like all the lines actually

    I also like the fact that you use French as well as English to write that is something I do too
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

  3. #3
    Registered User
    Join Date
    Jun 2013
    Posts
    547
    Thanks cacian! I think that a poem rife with metaphors is delicious!

Similar Threads

  1. Do we love to solve puzzles or do we love puzzle solvers?
    By Senior2315 in forum General Chat
    Replies: 0
    Last Post: 09-09-2010, 05:15 AM
  2. Love Loves. Love Fights. Love Wins.
    By Anonymous Angel in forum General Writing
    Replies: 1
    Last Post: 03-25-2009, 02:44 PM
  3. Love loves. Love fights. Love wins.
    By Anonymous Angel in forum General Writing
    Replies: 1
    Last Post: 03-09-2009, 10:05 AM
  4. Replies: 1
    Last Post: 10-01-2006, 04:57 AM

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •