"But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
"In flames and torment?""Oh, yes, I do."
"That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said."Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
"Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.
I liked it Rumfield. Don't stop writing. Experience will give weight to your words. Life can make a person feel lonely and isolated. Unlike some of the other readers, I liked the last line. Many of us have probably read that same line before, so it can seem like a cliche. The feeling behind the line isn't a cliche though, it's heartbreaking. We hear you here, and I hope you'll continue to share your works with us.
Nice scrap.Would like to read some of your professional poetry.
Don't like the porn version. All subtlety and ambiguity has gone.
Last edited by E.A Rumfield; 09-18-2012 at 02:51 PM.
Her hair was like a flowing cascade and her breasts were real awesome also.
My ***** Better Have My Money by Fly Guy
My ***** better have my money.
Through rain, sleet, or snow,
my ho better have my money.
Not half, not some, but all my cash.
Because if she don't, I'll put my foot dead in her ***.
Her hair was like a flowing cascade and her breasts were real awesome also.
My ***** Better Have My Money by Fly Guy
My ***** better have my money.
Through rain, sleet, or snow,
my ho better have my money.
Not half, not some, but all my cash.
Because if she don't, I'll put my foot dead in her ***.