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    Empty Drawers

    Consider the depth
    of an empty drawer.
    My tears can’t fall
    far enough
    to reach the bottom
    where seldom would a hand
    run across its core.
    Instead, they bead off the top coat,
    that solid front present before me.
    Dried, old wizened oak,
    how I long to sink into
    the untreated grain
    and apply my own tung oil
    with a seasoned brush.
    You say the satin sheen is chipped,
    yet I know how chiffoniers mount up
    like shallow rag gatherers of time,
    crammed and unable to slide shut.
    But the imperial measurements
    of thought out dimensions
    will form the thickest dovetail design
    which will stand the truest test
    and hold the largest capacity of all.
    It is only that drawer
    which my finger joints
    strain to stroke the surface of.
    Last edited by Delta40; 06-24-2012 at 06:51 PM.
    Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb

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    Still, on a chalk plateau Bar22do's Avatar
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    Oh Delta, you're finally back!!!! I was worried! when you're away for too long (and this WAS TOO LONG!) without notifying us, I suspect you are being revisited by your most disturbing "guests"... So glad you're back, and with this powerful, poignant verse which "took me by the throat"... you have this unusual talent to use an ordinary object, a furniture, a crumb... and tell your whole story through its means... there is here time and pain, loss and all those unbearable emotions which the reader shares while safe from any sentimentality whatsoever. Do you have a file where you keep your very best? Add this one to it -- and look for a publisher, for you're amazing. Happy coming back. I also mean this Forum (and I personally) is breathing better with you around!

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    What a wonderful response from Bar to your wonderful poem! You had me with the opening two lines and then you tightened your grip on me with the next two. You have the knack of speaking of sadness without ever getting maudlin.

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    Welcome back rivermouth, if you are actually back. You extend a metaphor well . And what Prince said

    For those who believe,
    no explanation is necessary.
    For those who do not,
    none will suffice.

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    Delta!

    You do it like no-one else

    You say the satin sheen is chipped,
    yet I know how chiffoniers mount up
    like shallow rag gatherers of time,
    crammed and unable to slide shut


    Yeah yeah!

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    An amazing piece. Like Bar, I am always amazed at tour ability to infuse the ordinary with magic and sound. It is a testament to your ability that the same parts of the poem appeal to each of us who have commented. Like Prince, I think the first two lines demand the readers attention. That first sentence is open and intriguing the way some people are skilled at creating the field for a continuing and interesting conversation with an inclusive opening comment.

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    Thank you, dearest friends.
    Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb

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    Delta! Long time, no see. Not only are you back, but with a new piece that
    is undeniably "Delta-esque!"

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