Do u remember Raskalnikov’s delirium, yeah?
Well that’s how I feel most of the time
Remorse runs through me as natural as the blood in my veins
Guilt flows with the force of neural electricity
And doubt sweats from pores, from the holes
The heart man the heart
I'm just a walking heart
Do I even have a head?
It is definitely a poem, but I'm not sure if you wrote it or overheard a poetic physicist having a conversation with his shrink.
I felt it. I didn't despise you. You didn't waste my time.
Last edited by miyako73; 05-03-2012 at 05:58 PM.
"You laugh at me because I'm different, I laugh at you because you're all the same."
--Jonathan Davis
I think you could start the poem at L3 and use Raskalnilov's delirium as a powerful metaphor after L5.
The last 3 lines are desperate, confused and finish the poem well.
Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb
Hey guys thanks for responses.
Delts, hmmm i think it's better at the start cos I want to keep it as bare as possible if u get me. I don't know tho - i might tinker with it l8r. Cheers flower
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