All matters of butterflies scrutinized
Manners overlooked
The wind composes the dumbest of instruments
Flowery and flowing the butterfly moves
Nets come up empty but never flailing
Because gilded butterflies count for bonus points
All matters of butterflies scrutinized
Manners overlooked
The wind composes the dumbest of instruments
Flowery and flowing the butterfly moves
Nets come up empty but never flailing
Because gilded butterflies count for bonus points
Bumpedy bump bump
I like this little piece a lot. So much said in such a tight poem.A Butterfly Lifestyle
All matters of butterflies scrutinized
Manners overlooked
The wind composes the dumbest of instruments
Flowery and flowing the butterfly moves
Nets come up empty but never flailing
Because gilded butterflies count for bonus points
L3... might be better with a substitution for "dumbest".
L4... I would be tempted to replace "moves" with "flutters" for the alliterative effect you have started.
L5... might be better with "ever" instead of "never".
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
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