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    The Voice Of The Loser

    Not my best thing but that's what I feel like sharing for now...(even if re-reading it, it does feel clumsy )
    I wrote it all of a sudden one day at school after an argument with a classmate (not my favourite kind of person) about trivial things.


    The Voice Of The Loser

    I'm the loser
    my taste is bitter
    and I know you can't understand my reasons
    but believe me, I don't understand yours
    I'm loveless
    you're satisfied
    I'm useless
    you feel you're always right
    I'm a polemist
    I can't help complaining
    about everything I see
    but when I do that
    it's not me
    it's just the voice of my restless conscience
    that comes over me
    and wants to overcome you:
    it needs affirmation
    and it can't get it
    cos it belongs to me
    and I'm a loser.

    23/01/01
    dead on the inside, i've got nothing to prove
    keep me alive and give me something to lose

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    I like it. And I can understand those feelings, I have them often.
    I have a plan: attack!

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    Hello, Koa

    I think you wrote another nice poem, Koa. I completely understand the feeling that you try to express - in contradiction to what your poem implies. I also have the irritating behaviour of complaining about my environment, usually correcting banal mistakes and bullying people around me with their lack of fantasy.

    The self mockery and the complaints about 'yourself' really create a sarcastic, annoying atmosphere which encourages 'the voice of the loser' even more. Nice!

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    Hey thanks! I thought it really sucked cos i wasnt having feedback
    dead on the inside, i've got nothing to prove
    keep me alive and give me something to lose

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    Hello, Koa

    That - indeed - is the problem we are all facing here on this forum, using these limited ways of communication.

    The fact that I don't post here as often as I once did, has to do with the amount of time that I spent on other things and hasn't got anything to do with the quality of the poems posted here.

    Greetings,

    Bart

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    Yeah i know- and i understand that people might read this and don t find anyhting to say...i don't always comment on all i read, even if i like it.

    And i should spend more time in other things (such as studying..ehmmm) and not here
    dead on the inside, i've got nothing to prove
    keep me alive and give me something to lose

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    o finally someone wrote a poem i could relate those feelings too. i really like it koa. I tried writing like that but .. i could not find the words for it. thanks!
    "My body won't succumb to my heart and it's tearing me apart"

    "There is no point to democracy when ignorance is celebrated"

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    Thanks a lot Phoenix. That's what poetry is for in mye view, give words to people to related feelings....share feelings. So what you said makes me really happy and proud Thanks.
    dead on the inside, i've got nothing to prove
    keep me alive and give me something to lose

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    Thanks, I love it. You seriously display poetry as an art. Thank you so much for letting us read your work!

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    i liked the opposite poles and the need to overwhelm another and hate yourself too. nice tangle of emotions here.
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