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    Orange Juice

    We were having breakfast
    that morning,
    and I was chewing too loud;
    the eggs had too much salt,
    the bacon was overcooked,
    and the toast was cold.
    You asked me if we
    had any orange juice:
    there wasn’t any.
    You asked me if I’d go
    get some.
    I said yes.
    All the stores were fresh out,
    so I had to go to the next town
    over.
    When I arrived home,
    I tried to turn
    the doorknob,
    but it was locked;
    my key didn't work
    anymore.
    I knocked, and there
    was no answer.
    I sat down on
    the steps with
    the carton
    beside me.
    I stayed there for days,
    and you never left the house
    (maybe you were already gone).
    I guess I took too long to get
    orange juice.
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    I like this offering... enough tension & melancholy to speculate about both parties.

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    agreed with TAYLOR. I did not expect the last sentence.
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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    I'm glad you two enjoyed it. Thank you very much for taking the time to read this.

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    Clever and sad.

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    Glad to see there is still some good on here.

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    Thanks for the kind words. I appreciate you taking the time to read this.

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