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    that

    I raise my profile
    I believe in docile
    my doctrine is
    opal.
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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    Enjoyed your minimalist poem very much. The expression "play of colour" was created for the opal to describe its iridescence, a playful way of describing your doctrine.

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
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    what if I were to bare my soul
    would you see me origami

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    This is a little gem of a poem, Cacian--pun intended. Your raised profile is an interesting image for the start--it has the feel of an autograph. And your final image also captures something unique about you--this time with fiery color (don't you just love an opal?). Sandwiched between is wordplay (between docile and doctrine)?that tells us this is a Cacian poem. And that in barely four lines. Nice work--in my opinion, your best so far.

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    tailor STATELY and Pompey Bum thank you very much for reading and the feedback.
    I much enjoyed reading them.
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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    On the road, but not! Danik 2016's Avatar
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    I specially loved the surprise contained in the last line.
    "You can always find something better than death."
    Jacob and Wilhelm Grimm, The Bremen Town Musicians

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    Quote Originally Posted by Danik 2016 View Post
    I specially loved the surprise contained in the last line.
    Danik lovely to see you posting again. Many thanks for reading.
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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