alas
the world has bravely set
sail
leaving a scale of tales that outweigh
the wale
blue lagoons swell
against the winds that charm
the hymns
beyond the waves that
beat the limbs
it rolls and twists
until it mists
love happy it blings
and wants to swing
until it slings
did not get the gist
all that sings and does not string
is not worth a thing.
Last edited by cacian; 07-12-2019 at 06:35 PM.
it may never try
but when it does it sigh
it is just that
good
it fly
It's nice, Cacian. I like that you are varying the rhyme more now and using some internal rhyme. It's always fun to read one of your poems.
Pompey so glad you liked this one. It is always a pleasure to read your comments.Originally Posted by Pompey Bum
It's nice, Cacian. I like that you are varying the rhyme more now and using some internal rhyme. It's always fun to read one of your poems.
it may never try
but when it does it sigh
it is just that
good
it fly
"alas
the world has bravely set
sail"
Very bold opening, I like it!
"blue lagoons swell
against the winds that charm"
These lines provide some lovely imagery with sensory input
Shadowlight many thanks for reading and comments.
it may never try
but when it does it sigh
it is just that
good
it fly
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