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    Inspired by MiltonSatyr



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    When there is nowhere left to run.

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    When your body collapses from the years of exhaustion
    and
    your heart implodes from the years of fear.

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    Hide
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    When you reach your hands out in all directions,
    only to feel corners.

    and the corners dont feel secure anymore, collapsing,
    as you implode upon yourself, hiding.

    Hide
    from my love for you
    Hide
    from your love for me
    Hide
    from the desire of our existence,
    back into the loneliness you've always known.

    Hide as a shadow that is always behind its maker
    never leading the direction it follows.

    Hide as the moon, when bathed in darkness,
    not seeking the sun's warmth
    that could give it life.


    Hide from yourself
    Hide
    Hide from the only thing that can free you
    Last edited by Shadowlight; 06-27-2019 at 03:31 AM.

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    I like this better than mine. Good job. I think adding some more concrete nouns would flesh it out more, but I like the tone a lot. Though I didn't like my poem, I'm happy it inspired you to write this because it is very enjoyable. Thanks for posting this.

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